YOUR SIGNS OF SUCCESS
- Begin in the action
- Present tense (I am, not I was)
- Short, Sharp Sentences
Key words: Waterfall, Jumping, Splash.
I am standing at the top of the waterfall, waiting for myself to get the confidence to jump.
“Come on Hanny, I will jump with you!” said my dad.
“1,2,3” SPLASH! As I was swimming back I was thinking, “That seemed to take for ages to reach the water.” I went under and came back up coughing but then I realized it was fresh water. I hopped out and then ran to my towel. It was so cold it felt like I was visiting Antarctica.