Thursday, March 21, 2013

Waterfall Jumping Splash

WALT choose words that describe a moment for the reader.

  • Begin in the action
  • Present tense (I am, not I was)
  • Short, Sharp Sentences

Key words: Waterfall, Jumping, Splash.

I am standing at the top of the waterfall, waiting for myself to get the confidence to jump. 

“Come on Hanny, I will jump with you!” said my dad. 
“1,2,3” SPLASH! As I was swimming back I was thinking, “That seemed to take for ages to reach the water.” I went under and came back up coughing but then I realized it was fresh water. I hopped out and then ran to my towel. It was so cold it felt like I was visiting Antarctica.

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